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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society?

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In the past century,
science
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 has been the most studied subject in universities all around the world.
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, In recent years, there has been a gradual shift toward other
subjects
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 like art and law, and the effects of
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 shift are concerning for many countries. The exponential growth of
science
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 brake throws in the 21st century has resulted in an enormous change in the quality of our lives. Technology and health care are the two most influenced sections of
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 growth.
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, most of these
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 branches have got more and more complicated which makes it more difficult to study and work in these fields.
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, other
subjects
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 like art and law have not seen much changes over the past decades.
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,
students
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 prefer to study
subjects
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 that are not very complicated to learn and in many cases graduated
students
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 in
subjects
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 other than
science
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 have less difficulty finding a job. The declining number of graduate
students
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 in
science
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subjects
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 can cause negative effects on society. Many countries rely on exporting technology equipment rather than oil and gas and many other countries want to become self-sufficient in those technologies.
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, they have to train enough
students
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 for their projected needs in the future.
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, the advancement of a society highly depends on the number of researchers and scholars in their academic environment. In conclusion, the
ifficulty
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difficulty
 of studying
science
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subjects
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 in universities has caused a shift in
students
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 willing to study these topics and the effects of
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 change will get worst over time as not enough researchers are available for the technological needs of the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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