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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been an enormous increase in the number of automobiles since the
first
 car has arrived in the year 1888. It is considered that the government should add some new rules and regulations for the
use
 of a car and its ownership ,and they can motivate individuals to
use
 other modes of transportation. I strongly agree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, by establishing new laws
such
 as limited
use
 of automobiles and restriction on its ownership would be highly beneficial. To explain
this
, there should be a law that one family can only purchase one vehicle. If there will be fewer vehicles on the roads,
this
 can lead to reducing traffic congestion in any country.
For example
, research shows that nowadays a huge number of countries implementing
this
 rule in order to reduce traffic ,and they are getting positive results.
Moreover
,the government
also
 can limit the usage of automobiles.
Secondly
, there are immense numbers of advantages of adding different kinds of public transportation. If people motivated to
use
 more public vehicles
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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