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In some countries, owning a home rether than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive oe negative situation?

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 is one of the fundamental necessities of human.
People
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 in some nations think that owning a
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 is better than renting one.
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trend and justify my opinion.
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 might be flexible to decorate or renovate their own
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. They may have the freedom to design what
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they need w hile renting a
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 is not allowed that.
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 who rent
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accommodation to live must get permission from a lessor when they want to fix or renovate a room.
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, restriction in ownership is less than in rental.
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 in some rental
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,
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, are not allowed to adopt their pets because it may be noisy or dirty.
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, they may feel lonely if they have to live alone. In some places, tenants are not allowed to cook, so they must buy instant foods to eat inside only.
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 may lead them to be unhealthy.
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 but not least, owning a
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 provides
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 with stability. They may have no worries about where will they have to live in the future. There is no necessity that
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 have to move before
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eadline when they have their own
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. They may secure and proud themselves because of their ability to get their own
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. As far as I am concerned, it is a positive situation that
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 have their own accommodation because it assures that they have their own properties to live in a long-term period.
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, it may help a government reduce the budget to provide
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 with stable accommodation and spend the money for another purpose which is more important,
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 as education. To sum up, owning
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ome is far better than renting
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ome because it provides
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 with flexibility, less restriction and
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 stability. It is an advantage which leads the government to spend money
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 more crucial projects than building
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ome for their
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