Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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as music and cinemas financially more than other public services provided in

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ation.

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, some believe that investment in entertainment industry

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less important than public service.

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, it is agreed that authorities must us these funds to consolidate local services

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improvements

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as medical and

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facilities yet to be advanced will prove

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overnment have achieved significant improvement in

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edical field if we compare it with

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ast decade. But, still

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some infrastructures have not been improved at

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xpected level

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several cities are still lack of hospitals, dispensaries, and ambulance for locals where financial support more crucial than recreational activities.

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, local authorities should raise their awareness in advancing these facilities than wasting money on arts that people even do not need them.

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, some part having luxury

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support while poorer province doesn’t.

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to reach

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every corner of the city so every student can acquire one.

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overnment should establish more schools and provide all the basic requirement, so

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of only focusing on growing cinemas they should develop more tuition

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ntertainment industry would not bring any benefits to those who are suffering due to under-developed facilities in their local areas and if children would not get access to proper

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they will for sure face unemployment which will directly impact on county economy.

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, music and cinemas can

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be a part of

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they should put their higher priorities on local services.