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In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children

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Nowadays, having no
children
 become a common trend for individuals all around the world. Some
people
 claim that couples should not have a
baby
 for many reasons. These
people
 can have a more economic
life
 and get rid of some problems.
On the other hand
, there are drawbacks of poses a kid
such
 as these families will not have the
next
 generation in terms of biologically and the experience
baby
 love.
To begin
 with, it is obvious that the partners who do not opt to
b
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the
a
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orn
baby
 are likely to elude the expenditures of growing a kid. In today’s contemporary world the cost of
life
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 is increasing day by day and
people
 have to work in order to meet their
children
’s daily and school needs.
This
 is more difficult for families with more than a child.
Moreover
, the born and growth juvenile is a crucial and difficult stage which is required care, attention and liability lifelong. It is a
well known
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 fact that
children
means
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 continuity of ancestry in term of biological evolution.
Firstly
, the bridge between the past and future is
i
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an
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mportant
t
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to
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ie for many
people
 and countries. The couples with no kids do not transfer their
life
 experiences, knowledge and cultures to other generation.
Secondly
,
these couple
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 cannot experience the excitement and beauty of rising a
baby
. Even though there are several challenging related kids,
children
is
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s
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the
a
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ource of
life
 and cheer. In conclusion, a number of
people
 believe that having no
children
 make their
life
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living
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 conditions better. They probably will not encounter the problems related
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kids.
Furthermore
,
n
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egative sides of
this
 situation are considered as a lack of generation and the feeling of love for the child.
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