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Some school have restricted the use of mobile phones. Do you think this is a negative development or a posititve one?

#school #phones #development #posititve
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It is true that the usage of mobile
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 schools has banned. Personally, I believe that
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tilization of mobile
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 negatively effects on not only learning but physical and social and I
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 agree with
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prohibition
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. I recognize the benefits of utilizing mobile
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 in school one of which is that assists study of
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tudent. Thay can extend their knowledge with huge data on the Internet.
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, when teachers have
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ssignment for
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, they can find ideas, information on the Internet.
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, I realize the usage
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 have more disadvantages than usefulness. Allowing mobile
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lassroom would result in cheating during the test or thinking
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positively
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. As an illustration,
students
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 can search for any questions with
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obile
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Furthermore
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 maybe reduce
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oncentration level if they always gaze on their
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,
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earning outcome can be decreasing rapidly. And using
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obile
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 too much in school, especially in break time, would impact student’s outdoor activities. They would connect with their friends by gaming, communicating,…
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 lone with their
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. They would have more close-knit relationship, widen their association and
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develop
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exercises
. In conclusion, I totally lean on that some schools have interdicted the utilize of
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 because of its
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disadvantages
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