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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax provate car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Traffic is a challenge for every developing region. Mandating heavy tax on vehicle owners and using that money for mobility improvement is one solution for
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 essay will discuss the pros and cons of the suggested policy. By institutionalizing the high cost of owning a car can have a negative impact on the economy. Take the case of an individual who plans to buy a four-wheeler. Thinking about the high price of ownership he may choose not to buy it. The cash which was planned for buying the car will remain in his savings account and will impact the manufacturer and societies wealth flow. The liquid asset gets blocked and may not be available for the circulation in the fiscal system.
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,high tax collected on car buyers and investing that money to improve public transportation will reduce trail congestion. It will
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 result in less motor-driven vessels on the route, thereby reducing the carbon footprint and improves air quality. To demonstrate, think about a situation where there are fewer cars on the lane, it will definitely reduce the number of accidents as well. Savings incurred on fuel is another benefit of the policy. Congestion on a roadway is a reality and solution for
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 a conundrum for almost all governing bodies. Irrespective of the scale of the problem the authorities should attempt to solve it immediately. Levying a high tax on personal cars could be a good starting point to tackle the issue. Getting things done is far more important than being perfect.
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