It's been seen that reading for pleasure develops imaginations and better language skills than to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to profoundly thank your organisation for the decision to spend money for the benefit of our community. I deeply appreciate your readiness to sponsor a local junior
sports
team
or alternatively arrange two open-air
concerts
. Needless to say, financial support to a children's
sports
team
will be notably advantageous for
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boththe
team
and your business. With your sponsorship, they will surely get advanced training which will develop their potential in
sports
and in parallel promote your brand. Perhaps, a few of them will bring glory in professional competitions in the future to make us proud as a community.
On the other hand
, arranging two open-air
concerts
is
also
a great idea as people will immensely enjoy the performance and some local bands would get the chance to show their talents. It certainly will promote our culture and heritage. I am positive either of your initiatives will serve our community greatly.
However
, supporting the local
sports
team
has a more eminent result than escalating the music fans by sponsoring
concerts
, I believe.
Concerts
would be temporary entertainments for the local people, but provision for the young sportsmen will be remembered for a long and would give us many occasions to celebrate and be proud of. Once again thank you for a commendable initiative. Yours faithfully, Edward Jenkins

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