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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#meat #diet
Nowadays many people choose to become vegetarian with the belief that meat is not necessary
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 a healthy
diet
. So, does vegetarianism really bring health to humans? In my personal opinion, I do not agree with
this
diet
. Vegetarian diets often lack many important nutrients despite many substitutes. Low
protein
 content in plant-based products with lower quality and unbalanced amino acid composition in them can lead to severe
protein
 deficiency.
In addition
, despite the high vitamin content in vegetables and fruits, the complete elimination of meat in the
diet
 will lead to
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eficiency of iron, vitamin b12 and
dha
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DHA
. All of these negatively affect health, so a balanced
diet
 between animal-based and plant-based products should be recommended.
Therefore
, vegetarianism is not suitable for everyone.
First
, nutritional deficiencies because
this
diet
 may slow down and limit children's physical development. For women, nutritional deficiencies, especially
protein
 and some necessary acid amin, can lead to
anemia
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 and some cardiovascular diseases, and excessive consumption of carbohydrates can be the cause of metabolic diseases
such
 as diabetes or
obese
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.
Finally
, for men, using soy products as a vegetarian
protein
 supplement can cause hormonal disorders, because of the high estrogen content of these beans.
In addition
,
this
diet
 is
also
 dangerous for people who are allergic to nuts, because it considers nuts as one of the main foods of the meal. In conclusion, a healthy
diet
 is one that suits the needs of each individual, have a variety of nutrients and food sources. So, from my personal point of view, being vegetarian, or saying that meat is not needed in the
diet
 is not an idea that gets support.
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