In many countries women are allowed to take maternity leave from their jobs during the first month after the birth of their baby. Does advantage outweigh disadvantages?

In a number of nations, maternity leave is granted to
working class
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women within and after the
first
month of delivery.
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notion has some pro's and con's which would be
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elaborated on.
However
, I am of the viewpoint that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
To begin
with, it is highly essential for countries to permit postpartum mothers to take work leave as
this
is both advantageous to
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and child.
Firstly
, a mother is able to nurse and bond with
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aby properly .
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,
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exclusive breastfeeding of infant, as breastmilk is highly nutritious to
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hild,
thus
enhancing growth and preventing diseases.
Furthermore
, neonate becomes fond of mum and builds up
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rust during
this
process.
Secondly
, ladies who just delivered are able to get financial support from the institution where they work, as their salaries are not cut off despite the leave granted, as
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they do not struggle financially. In essence, time off job's following
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birth is of great benefit to both neonate and women.
On the other hand
, despite the proponents aforementioned, working females may find it difficult to get up to speed at their task after 3 to 4 months off duties. Particularly, due to the fact that they may be distracted or stressed from baby duties.
For instance
, a sister of mine who resumed after her leave, had difficulty in juggling nursing a child and her occupational activities, as her mind often got preoccupied with her infant. For
this
reason, it may be necessary to help post
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with coping skills prior to
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esumption of official duties. In conclusion, nations that grant mums time off work should be
further
encouraged as the advantages outweigh the disadvantages .
In addition
, strategies to
further
enhance coping skills can be implemented to avert the
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