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The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many individuals opine that exchange of goods internationally for free is imperative for the nation's financial growth.
Conversely
, others believe it has a detrimental effect on native companies or other manufacturers.
This
 essay will discuss the merits of foreign exchange of stock, followed by its drawbacks, and will
finally
 reach a conclusion. On the
first
 hand, foreign trade contributes drastically to the country's economy.
Moreover
, we must consider how it facilitates good relations between the two nations.
For example
, the good relationship between India and Nepal can be attributed to the significant exchange of goods, especially, weaponry.
Thus
, it has significantly helped Nepal to form a strong military force, which eventually has helped India to become financially stronger.
On the other hand
, one must not neglect its demerits as it evident that people have become reliant on purchasing items which are imported.
Furthermore
, despite the poor quality of those products, they still consider to buy them due to their low cost.
For instance
, many of us consider Chinese phones as they are affordable, but we must consider products which are made in our own motherland.
As a result
, it will promote native manufacturers to flourish their businesses to a great extent and will
also
 contribute to improving the country's economy.
Finally
, it can be concluded that
although
 at times is necessary that we buy goods from a different land due to its non-availability in the current location, we must support our local industries whenever it is possible rather than making the other nations richer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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