Topic: In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? disagree?

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Dear Josh, I am writing to let you know that I attended one of your band gigs on
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Saturday at the forest club. I really enjoyed the performance and thought that you were an exceptionally good singer. Let me explain what I really loved about your music.
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, you have a really fresh voice which makes it hard to not notice you among the other singers.
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, you are so comfortable with all notes and how well you manage high pitch songs. Even I am a budding singer and always find it hard to reach those high notes. I have been singing for the
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year, and I
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write and compose my own songs. I have been looking for an opportunity in music for a while now. After listening to you
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Saturday. I thought maybe you can help me in with my high notes and how to give that powerful performance. I would
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love to audition for your band if you feel I have the potential. Looking forward to a positive response. Yours Faithfully, Emmy
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