Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education.

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It is argued that
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crime is regarded as the best way;
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those with better education is the best remedy.I totally disagree with the above statement and think that focus should be given on education.
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to suffer from depression and other mental problem too.
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who are recently been released from police custody.
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darker when they are sent back to their home.
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those to come in contact with bad companies as there is
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age on the
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olice for the case of theft and was kept for a week.After returning from prison he started using drugs. So,
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ndirect medium to higher the crime rates. In
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ad company after putting them in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tackles root causes
  • preventative approach
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making skills
  • recidivism rates
  • equipping
  • socio-economic benefits
  • underlying factors
  • poverty
  • ignorance
  • lack of opportunities
  • rehabilitation
  • ineffective
  • higher rates of re-offending
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