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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Advancement in technology opened doors to various
methods
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 of shopping. Shopping online has become one of the primary
methods
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 of purchasing goods and services. I totally disagree, with the author's point of view. Buying goods can only take up a few percentages of regular shopping
methods
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, but will not lead to shutting down the majority of shops in cities and towns. Raise in access to technology, has given
consumers
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 a chance to explore different shopping
methods
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. Shopping online thought popular e-commerce websites became a trend among today's younger generation.
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, it has given
consumers
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 the benefit to search and purchase products easily.
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,
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 style of shopping has taken away the traditional look and feel for the
product
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consumers
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 used to experience before purchasing it.
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, the survey conducted by a retail store shows that
consumers
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 prefer to demo products like home appliances, perfumes, and other expensive goods before consuming. The easiest way of owning the
product
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 is to go to the nearest local store and purchasing. Online shopping made
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 delivery comfortable to your doorsteps, but the price for delivering, damage and return policies need to be paid by the consumer.
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, shopping at the nearest store will overcome any
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 problem associated, giving consumer more flexibility to return the
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 in a short span of time and owning a new one.
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, online e-commerce giants are coming up with more and more e-shops in towns and cities to overcome
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 barrier. In conclusion, online shopping has given the opportunity of finding products and owing them at a user's comfort level. Replacing, the idea of the way user looks and feel for the
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 cannot go away, on top of that the barrier associated with the delivery and other policies of online shopping makes it hard for the closing of all shops in town and cities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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