In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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everything is growing very fast pace. It includes infrastructure developments, industries, IT parks and many more. As we know that everything is expanded we need new

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not protect their landscape they are facing major problems of their livelihood like poor quality of air, shortage of water, increase in temperature, asthmatic health problem increase and many more. In my opinion

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

In marriages today, some argue that is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Cultures around the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative trend?

In recent times, many people have focused on the negative effects advertising has on children’s health, behaviour and family relationships. Advertising to children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?