In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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everything is growing very fast pace. It includes infrastructure developments, industries, IT parks and many more. As we know that everything is expanded we need new homes for the people who migrated from rural areas to metro cities for jobs and business
however
only
countryside
space
is available from them to build
a new homes
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. In my viewpoint
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we need to protect the
space
available in the
Countryside
. To commence with, landscapes are very important to protect our natural habitat, if we removed them for construction of new homes
then
we will lose so many things like natural scenery, fresh air, agriculture land and many more.
Countryside
spaces are enhancing the beauty of the city and
moreover
,that
space
is habitant of
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ot of migrating birds and animal. Forest department of California published a report
last
week it states that
,
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cities that do not protect their landscape they are facing major problems of their livelihood like poor quality of air, shortage of water, increase in temperature, asthmatic health problem increase and many more. In my opinion
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government bodied has to take precautionary measures to protect the
space
available in the
countryside
. Lately, the government should step ahead and encourage the builders to build new apartments
instead
of individual houses by giving them tax benefits along with that encourage farmers not to sell their land to builders for making new
homeshomes
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. We need to educate people that landscapes are very important for us in many ways like people spend their weekends there to enjoy the beauty of nature. In conclusion, I want to say that
countryside
spaces are adding beautification to the cities and
moreover
from our health perspective we need to protect them. There is a vital role of government agencies to protect it and educate builders not to construct any infrastructure in the
countryside
.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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