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With the increasing demand for energy oil and gas, people should be look for sources of oil and gas in remote an untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages of damaging such areas?

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As the need for various forms of energies
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 as oil and gas is on the rise, many people assert that these
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 resources must be explored in other unchanged natural habitats. In my opinion, there are more benefits to
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 approach as compared to its drawbacks.
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the negatives, discovering untouched natural places to meet our
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 demands may adversely affect biodiversity.
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 is because oil and gas exploration requires a lot of drilling and construction to fetch them from their deposits resulting in massive amounts of pollution.
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, oil exploration in the Arabian sea by Indian government led to the sharp decline in the aquatic life due to heightened water pollution. As a consequence, a lot of species are on the verge of extinction.
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, if the authorities had invested in alternative sources of
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, they could have met the
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 requirements without harming sea life.
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, I believe, its disadvantages need to be considered into the light of advantages, and the most important of these is the quick response. As
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 requirements across the globe are increasing on an unparalleled pace across the globe,
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 time tested approach may result in providing speedy solutions.
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, there are huge economic benefits associated with
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 approach.
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, petroleum and gas are among the highly sought commodities in the globe today due to their dependence on
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 production.
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, many countries make a lot of money by exporting them to
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 striven countries In conclusion,
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 looking for untouched areas to meet
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 demands has resulted in environmental disbalance because of pollution and construction activities, I believe the perks of quicker
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 solutions and economic gains exceeds the aforementioned downsides.

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