These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development?

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Because of Current globalization, professionals in certain areas will be able to find

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jobs

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overseas, rather than stay in the same

country

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they born.

As a result

, workers tend to leave their

country

with their families to find a better life and better payments for the service that they provide.

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essay will discuss how

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ositive aspect of

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the negative aspect of the

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, moving to

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well paid

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country

is more

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popular

, because people want to

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explore

more about

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culture.

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, they will try to move from their motherland as soon as they got

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oppertunity

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opportunity

to work for a

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fringe

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that

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20% of graduates from

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will likely to move into the western

country

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, they believe if the

familly

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family

members moved to

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another developed

country

with them, it would be a good

opertunity

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opportunity

for their

genaration

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generation

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uality education.

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, 95% of western countries education are

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up to

date when comparing it with south

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. On other hand, some labours think it is not a good idea to

travel

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another

country

. Because they

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it could lead to

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the bond with their other

familly

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family

members

such

grand mothers

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grand fathers

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and other

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relatives

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niversity of Oxford

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that

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99% of the

immigrents

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immigrants

will not able to contact their

realative

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relatives

relative

properly.

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, if the

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family

used to

travel

more with their works their children could not able to get a

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education.

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children

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need to

travel

different

country

if their parent represents

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deplomatic

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diplomatic

. In conclusion, travelling with the

familly

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family

members always keep them happy and will encourage them to

achive

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achieve

more future goals,

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even thought

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few negativity

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it will always good to

travel

with our close once, rather than alone.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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319 words

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Your opinion

In some countries people are still discussing whether they should have the same job that they had in their country or not but people do not try to listen to each other to understand and choice is it okay to do it or not.

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in many countries goverment are investing in new technology to deal with the public. why is this happening ? do you think this is a appropriate use of goverment money?

The number of older people is increasing. Some people think that this will cause problems in their countries; others believe this group is important to society.

Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

Example Question–Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers' (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).Do you agree or disagree?