These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development?

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Because of Current globalization, professionals in certain areas will be able to find

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jobs

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overseas, rather than stay in the same

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they born.

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, workers tend to leave their

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with their families to find a better life and better payments for the service that they provide.

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the negative aspect of the

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, moving to

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another

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well paid

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country

is more

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popular

, because people want to

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explore

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culture.

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, they will try to move from their motherland as soon as they got

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oppertunity

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to work for a

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fringe

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that

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20% of graduates from

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will likely to move into the western

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, they believe if the

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family

members moved to

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another developed

country

with them, it would be a good

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opportunity

for their

genaration

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generation

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uality education.

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date when comparing it with south

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. On other hand, some labours think it is not a good idea to

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another

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. Because they

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it could lead to

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the bond with their other

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family

members

such

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grand fathers

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and other

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relatives

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niversity of Oxford

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that

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99% of the

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immigrants

will not able to contact their

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relatives

relative

properly.

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, if the

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family

used to

travel

more with their works their children could not able to get a

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education.

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children

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need to

travel

different

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if their parent represents

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deplomatic

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diplomatic

. In conclusion, travelling with the

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family

members always keep them happy and will encourage them to

achive

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achieve

more future goals,

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few negativity

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it will always good to

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with our close once, rather than alone.

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These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development?

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