Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed by a few individuals that
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ought to be produced in a nation as much as possible so that negligible importing is required. I support
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notion to a large extent
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my viewpoints for the same will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. Admittedly, production of
crops
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depends upon the geographical factors, suitable land and weather conditions.
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is primarily
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a
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fact that
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parameters decide which
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can be
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grown
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in a particular area.
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reason, it is not likely to grow every kind of
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in all the countries.
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, they are reluctant to import
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from other parts of the world in order to feed their residents.
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, Arab countries fit well into
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situation, whose deserted lands and dry weather do not allow them to produce
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locally.
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, it is with the maximum production of
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within the country that
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the economy
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is revived.
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, when no
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is imported, the demand for the local crop is increased
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eventually, farmers get the highest price for their yield. In
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way, in the absence of tax and other related costs to importing, not only the agriculture sector booms but
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other industries associated with it, thereby
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the entire economy.
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is apparently witnessed in
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the case
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of a country like Argentina, where the economy largely depends on agriculture, and most of the
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is produced domestically,
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which contributes
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50% to their GDP.
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, by producing most of the
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domestically, dependency on other nations is eliminated. It has been observed that
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is not likely to
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during
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a weather
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crisis
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such
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as heavy rains
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other countries.
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, people have to suffer
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starvation,
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they do not get the required nutrition.
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, if most of the
food
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is grown in the nation, it can easily feed the population. Not only
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, preservatives are often added to the imported foods in an attempt to keep
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fresh for a prolonged period since they are transported from long distances. Undoubtedly, these preservatives are detrimental to health.
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,
although
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unfavourable conditions might deter the growth of
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in some areas,
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apply
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domestic
food
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production is
encouraged
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still encouraged
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, which is evidently beneficial for
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the government
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and residents.

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You show a clear view and give reasons. To reach a higher band, add a balanced view by noting some drawbacks and limits of this plan, and use more real examples.
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Clear stance and linked ideas in paragraphs
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Some good link phrases and repeating idea
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