With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Due to
advanced medicine and specialized treatments, humans have been increasing their life expectancy. Nowadays the
society must take responsibility Correct article usage
apply
of
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for
a
plethora of elderly crowd since the population Correct article usage
the
are
living more than Correct subject-verb agreement
is
never
. It is known that all the countries should expend a lot of resources to assist their older public. Correct your spelling
ever
However
, only who
contributed to their retirement Correct pronoun usage
those who
has
the right to receive Correct subject-verb agreement
have
such
cares
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care
also
money. For instance
, in my country
only the people who Add a comma
country,
work
more than 30 years have been receiving the benefits of Wrong verb form
have worked for
government
to enjoy their retirement and spend that money Correct article usage
the government
with
whatever they need. Change preposition
on
Therefore
, most of
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apply
the
people should plan for making all the contributions to receive Correct article usage
apply
this
money later to take
a comfortable life. Verb problem
have
In addition
, the Government must incentivize the health sector with the aim to improve the life of ancient people. These actions might benefit who
really Correct pronoun usage
those who
needs
help because with the proper Correct subject-verb agreement
need
medicine
society could live longer with plenty of health. Add a comma
medicine,
Besides
that, investing in proper treatments should also
help and
boost the Correct word choice
apply
population
lives. Change noun form
population's
Likewise
, cancer has always been Correct pronoun usage
one on
on
the most undesirable diseases in the world. Change preposition
of
However
, doctors and scientists have been improving the treatment Change preposition
by analyzing
analyzing
the root causes Change preposition
by analyzing
of
Change preposition
apply
it
. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Consequently
, the positive results have been increasing also
the Correct your spelling
as
survive
indicator. Replace the word
survival
To conclude
, it is undeniable that all nations must take with marvellous support of all elderly community. These group
might pay attention to the contribution part to maintaining all the Fix the agreement mistake
groups
cares
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care
also
resources they need. Besides
that, the world must keep finding better strategies and treatments to provide worthy care for all human being
.Fix the agreement mistake
beings
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