In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can it cause?

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It is a well-known fact that these days many countries are experiencing heavy migration from
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, one of the main drivers for the population to relocate to the more urbanized areas are the higher chances of employment. Bigger cities offer a wider range of business entities and potential job-givers.
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, there is more fish in the sea rather than in the lake. As a consequence of
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ensible shortage in human resources and labour force.
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, more built-up locations can provide extra activities for the younger generation’s development.
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, every parent wants his/her child to strive and succeed in future,
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they tend to involve the kids into various extracurricular activities and clubs,
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dance classes, sports clubs, art classes, musical schools and so on.
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of countryside schooling system. The
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students are enrolled – the less extracurricular activities become available. All in all, the vast migration of citizens from the country to the city may lead to the labour force unavailability and worsening of the extracurricular development of the youth in rural areas.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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