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In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days multinational
companies
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 and their
products
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 are dominating the international markets. Even though their
products
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 have raised the standard and
quality
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 but they have created a huge impact on a local market.
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,some
people
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 might say these
companies
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 and their
products
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 are damaging the
quality
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 of life but personally, I believe they are much beneficial for any country.
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, let us consider multinational
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.
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 local
companies
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 provide good
quality
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 but still,they are incompetent to provide a diversity of
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 which we get in multinational
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.
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 year itself a multinational company launched 6 different flavours of facewash as they come to know few
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 are allergic to one particular flavour. Due to
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 kind of gesture,
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 started liking multinational
products
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.
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 of spoiling the
quality
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 of life, these
products
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 are increasing the standard of life.
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, multinational
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 help to raise the economy of the country where ever they set their factories. Some
people
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 still think that these
companies
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 force local
companies
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 to go out of business but that’s not true. A huge amount of raw material is required which they will get from the local country in turns which are going to boost the economy of that particular company. Apart from that, they are going to create mass employment which will help to reduce the unemployment index of the local county.
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, these
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 are providing a high pay scale to their employees which helps
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 to fulfil their needs and desires. In conclusion, I believe that if the local government put proper rules and regulation on these multinational
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 so that local
companies
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 should not get any harm. By doing so we can make most of the benefits from these
companies
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 without any disadvantages.
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