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In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days multinational
companies
 and their
products
 are dominating the international markets. Even though their
products
 have raised the standard and
quality
 but they have created a huge impact on a local market.
However
,some
people
 might say these
companies
 and their
products
 are damaging the
quality
 of life but personally, I believe they are much beneficial for any country.
Firstly
, let us consider multinational
products
.
However
 local
companies
 provide good
quality
 but still,they are incompetent to provide a diversity of
products
 which we get in multinational
products
.
Last
 year itself a multinational company launched 6 different flavours of facewash as they come to know few
people
 are allergic to one particular flavour. Due to
this
 kind of gesture,
people
 started liking multinational
products
.
Instead
 of spoiling the
quality
 of life, these
products
 are increasing the standard of life.
Secondly
, multinational
companies
 help to raise the economy of the country where ever they set their factories. Some
people
 still think that these
companies
 force local
companies
 to go out of business but that’s not true. A huge amount of raw material is required which they will get from the local country in turns which are going to boost the economy of that particular company. Apart from that, they are going to create mass employment which will help to reduce the unemployment index of the local county.
Moreover
, these
companies
 are providing a high pay scale to their employees which helps
people
 to fulfil their needs and desires. In conclusion, I believe that if the local government put proper rules and regulation on these multinational
companies
 so that local
companies
 should not get any harm. By doing so we can make most of the benefits from these
companies
 without any disadvantages.
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