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Some people believe that technology has made man more social and others think that it has made him less social. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In the past two decades, advancements in new
technologies
 have changed human life in many ways. one of which is the way
people
 interact with each other. Some say
people
 are getting more social thanks to the new
technologies
, others argue that these new advancements have caused
people
 to be less social.
Although
 nowadays more
people
 are connected worldwide, I believe individuals are getting more and more isolated. The fact that we can talk to anyone in the world in a matter of seconds, is very phenomenal if we consider that telephone was invented less than 100 years ago. New
technologies
 like social
media
 have been designed to connect
people
 all around the world. Thanks to social
media
,
for instance
, I was able to find my elementary school friends.
Therefore
, for some
people
,
this
 level of connection helps them to be more social.
On the other hand
, most of the social
media
 friendships are limited to text messages. Not very long ago all the social interactions were physical. I can recall the joy of playing with my friends in a park near our home when I was a kid. But unfortunately, children don't like to play outside anymore and they are practically glued to their phones and tablets. In my opinion,
this
 is very concerning because they haven't learned how to socially and physically interact with other children. In conclusion,
Although
 social
media
 has connected
people
 all around the world it has caused
people
 and especially children not to be willing to interact physically with their friends.
Therefore
, I believe that some of the new
technologies
 have caused
people
 to be less social and we have to be more careful about how we use them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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