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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

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To live in a good environment is always a nice habit. In India, it is believed that the
first
 thing
one
 should do is clean the
place
then
 it is either a house or workplace, as goddess Lakshmi will bring more wealth to you. Despite, some beliefs, scientifically it is
also
 advisable to keep the surroundings neat and tidy. In my opinion, it is important to keep home and workplace tidy along with the belongings in their right
place
.
Firstly
,
besides
 ritual or belief,
one
 should always make sure that the
place
 where he or she resides or
work
 should always be neat n tidy as
this
 plays a major role in once thought process.
For example
, say if the
place
 where you live or
work
 is not clean, is stinking,
then
 whatever
one
 do that will bother and
one
 won't be at peace or concentrate on
work
, affect on the productivity of once
work
.
Secondly
, if we see
this
 thing in a scientific way
then
one
 health can deteriorate,
one
 can face many health issues like asthma, malaria, and many more diseases. It is like an open invitation to various diseases. Always time will get wasted in finding things if they are not kept in
place
. In conclusion, I would say it is always advisable to live in a healthy and fresh environment so
one
 will be fit and can bring more productivity and creativity in there
work
, as well as after having a hectic day in office when
one
 returns at home could relax in a much better way, to get ready for
next
 day challenges which are waiting for
one
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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