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Talk about the pros and cons of this era as is full of daily inventions.

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Nowadays, many countries around the world are invented a new thing every day. From my point of view, there are a lot of advantages and disadvantages that there are many creations at present. On the one hand, in every country of
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 era has equipment everywhere, and there are 2 benefits for citizens, so it makes some
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nventions are helped them a lot because technology at present is very high.
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, some businesses create things in order to make
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 have more comfortable.
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,
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 make
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 have high quality more than a time when they do not have anything.
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, some
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 have benefits to make
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 comfortable and help them.
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, several
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 believe that
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 have many drawbacks because some creations are not helped or make
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 have a good day.
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, more and more
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 are very expensive.
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 buy it, it is made
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 do not have much money to spend in daily life.
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, some enterprises are not created things that helpful and comfortable for
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, so it is very useless for citizens.
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, some
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 think that it is not important for their lives.
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, more and more
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 particularly older
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, they will live hard
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every day because countries, where has equipment, is not useful for them. The majority of older
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 do not know how to use technologies, so it makes their life uncomfortable and it is very hard for them
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daily.
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, every equipment is useful when several
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 like adults use it.
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, some
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 are useful. To sum up, in the world, every country in
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 era has many
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good quality.
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benefits and drawbacks as
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 have full
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 in their countries.
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