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Some people say that when buying a product (e.g. a mobile/cell phone), or choosing a service (e.g. medical treatment), price is the most important thing to consider. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is essential that
people
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 take time to reflect on how much money they should spend on an
item
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 or
service
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, and whether or not they can actually afford it within their available budget. Over the
last
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 few decades, the rise in personal debt has escalated as
people
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 are tempted to buy goods and services due to pressure from advertising and the increasingly easy access
of
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 credit cards. For
this
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 reason, any
purchase
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that is
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 costly and is bought using credit ought to be well thought through, particularly when the
item
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 is a luxury
item
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that is
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 not actually essential. It is thought by some
people
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 that the price of a product or
service
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 is essential to consider before deciding to
purchase
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 something. While I agree that
people
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 need to consider carefully before spending large amounts of money in order to avoid debt, the necessity of the
purchase
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 must play a role in the decision to buy.
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, there are circumstances when the cost of a
service
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 or
item
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 becomes an irrelevant consideration. A typical example of
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 would be when someone’s life depends on a product or
service
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,
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 as a new treatment for a disease not offered through normal channels. In
such
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 a case, a person’s budget becomes redundant and the expense should not deter someone from proceeding with the
purchase
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.
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, these situations are rare and in most circumstances price ought to be considered so that excessive spending is planned and budgeted to avoid serious debt problems. In conclusion,
people
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 should deliberate carefully before spending large sums of money on goods and services, except in cases of dire necessity.
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