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Some people prefer to provide help and support directly to those in the local community who need it. Others, however prefer to give money to national and international charitable organizations. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Charitable deeds are indeed precious
thus
, goes a long way in meeting the needs of the less privileged. There are arguments on whether to donate funds to charitable bodies or to help offer
support
 directly to people in need.
This
 essay will analyze both views and give a concluding opinion. On the one hand, those who
support
 donating funds to charitable
organizations
 believe that these
organizations
 have a broader view of the many societies in need. They understand that these bodies are able to reach out to many
communities
 at the same time.
This
 is because they have enough manpower to serve the various
communities
 they tend to care for.
Also
, these
organizations
 have enough funds to cater for their complex multiple needs. It is due to donations made by different people that sum up to huge amounts of money that can meet with the dire needs all at once.
For example
, Smile foundation, a
non governmental
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 organization located in Lagos, Nigeria reported that they raised a total amount of 200 million
naira
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which supported the education, care for the elderly and the provision of foodstuffs for the less privileged in Lagos state, Nigeria after identifying the major needs to be met.
On the other hand
, perhaps supporters of helping local
communities
 directly may claim that they have a genuine sense of
fulfillment
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 which might be due to their involvement in the entire process of rendering
support
.
Also
, they may refer to the respect and love that earn from helping their immediate community.
In addition
,
this
 can eliminate every chance of corruption. In conclusion, donating to
non profit
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organizations
 will serve more societies and tend to huge needs of societies while, helping local
communities
 one on one will give a sense of satisfaction, respect and
corruption free
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 service. I believe that both systems have
there
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 benefits and none should be ruled out, understanding that both are ways of offering
support
 to the needy.
Submitted by Oludiran Tijesulola  on

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