Nowadays, movies and computer games containing violence are very popular. Some people believe that they have negative effect on the society and should be banned, others, however, believe that it is harmless entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In present days, horrifying
crime
movies
and
games
have become so famous as everyone adores to watch
such
movies
. The argument on ceasing
this
kind of activities is the debatable issue which is
both
agreed and disagreed with.
This
essay will thoroughly analyse and describe
both
of these views with appropriate examples before moving to the conclusion.
To begin
with,
this
sort of scene on the screens might be imitated by the general mass and the rate of
crime
may increase even more.
Moreover
, the horrifying
games
and movie clips can teach the tactics on how to commit
crime
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especially to youngsters. To illustrate, young people are fascinated
on
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mimicking the movie stars ,if they watch the film which contains extreme violating videos on it, eventually
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they might try it in their real life.
Hence
, as general masses may get involved in offensive activities due to the idea provided by those
movies
,it is considered to stop prohibit
such
videos and playing sports as well. In another side, it is considered that those
movies
are highly thrilling and exciting.
Furthermore
, it triggers the alertness and curiosity of a person in
a
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extreme level due to which one can feel immense pleasure while watching it.
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, about three
quarter
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of the citizens of Nepal adore
to watch
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the
crime
series "Sabdhan" because of having so many surprising and unrealistic criminal issues related to the
real life
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,which has become so popular all around the country as it helps to rejuvenate them and provides
e
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normous amount of happiness.
Therefore
, as those
movies
help to add the cheerful moment in their lives , it is wished to allow them
w
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atch
movies
and play the
games
related
tothe
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to the
the
to
same topic In conclusion, the
movies
containing frightening part are
both
beneficial and harmful as
c
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hild can become offensive
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on the one hand , meanwhile ,it is the great source of entertainment
on the other hand
. considering and evaluating
both
the sides , I opine that the negative effect is more serious which outweigh the positive of it.
Thus
, it is far better to stop releasing and prohibiting
such
games
to be played.
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