Nowadays, movies and computer games containing violence are very popular. Some people believe that they have negative effect on the society and should be banned, others, however, believe that it is harmless entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In present days, horrifying especially to youngsters. To illustrate, young people are fascinated they might try it in their real life. on the one hand , meanwhile ,it is the great source of entertainment
crime
movies
and games
have become so famous as everyone adores to watch such
movies
. The argument on ceasing this
kind of activities is the debatable issue which is both
agreed and disagreed with. This
essay will thoroughly analyse and describe both
of these views with appropriate examples before moving to the conclusion.
To begin
with, this
sort of scene on the screens might be imitated by the general mass and the rate of crime
may increase even more. Moreover
, the horrifying games
and movie clips can teach the tactics on how to commit crime
Add the comma(s)
,
on
mimicking the movie stars ,if they watch the film which contains extreme violating videos on it, eventuallyVerify preposition usage
by
with
Add a comma
,
Hence
, as general masses may get involved in offensive activities due to the idea provided by those movies
,it is considered to stop prohibit such
videos and playing sports as well.
In another side, it is considered that those movies
are highly thrilling and exciting.Furthermore
, it triggers the alertness and curiosity of a person in a
extreme level due to which one can feel immense pleasure while watching it. Change the article
an
For example
, about three quarter
of the citizens of Nepal adore Replace the word
quarters
to watch
the Change the verb form
watching
crime
series "Sabdhan" because of having so many surprising and unrealistic criminal issues related to the real life
,which has become so popular all around the country as it helps to rejuvenate them and provides Add a hyphen
real-life
e
normous amount of happiness. Add an article
an
Therefore
, as those movies
help to add the cheerful moment in their lives , it is wished to allow them w
atch Add the particle
to
movies
and play the games
related tothe
same topic
In conclusion, the Correct your spelling
to the
the
to
movies
containing frightening part are both
beneficial and harmful as c
hild can become offensiveAdd an article
a
the
Add the comma(s)
,
on the other hand
. considering and evaluating both
the sides , I opine that the negative effect is more serious which outweigh the positive of it. Thus
, it is far better to stop releasing and prohibiting such
games
to be played.Submitted by namunakarki23 on
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