Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that the situations are not the same in the whole growth, these are changing in every part of
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oul. Some people believe that we have to accept a bad situation while some think its good to improve these situations.
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ailure or related to money.
For example
, if a new employer in a new company hired, it is obvious he does so many mistakes and he feels he does not fit for
this
job and it makes him unpleasant.
Moreover
, we always create over expenses according to our earning, but most of the people they do over the expense, after they are in stress, they realise them the
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shortage
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of money.
However
, efforts always make human perfect.
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, in the beginning,everyone face so many hardships in every sector, it does not matter the only job but so many other fields
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erson does not try to do more efforts for doing any task , he never achieves it.
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if wrong things eliminate from actions, it is obvious makes him perfect and it gives happiness. Even, overdue expense always creates a mental depression,
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it can be stopped by creating a barrier as per earning. To conclude, it is inevitable to accept unsatisfactory in life, but most of the time it gives a lesson how to delete wrong things from efforts and tells what should we have to add more to reduce these situations from life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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