More developing countries are being given aid by international organisations to help them in their development plan. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Nowadays,
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international organizations like NGO, INGO, WHO are
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standard
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to develop the
countries
which are in need. While
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some advocate that it is better to help monetarily others believe that practical assistance would be more effective. Even though both the
arguement
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arguments
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reasonable , I
support
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idea.
To begin
with, the developing
countries
have more plans and agendas to foster the situation of a nation which can be impossible without
money
.
Moreover
, to continue different projects like
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oad construction site, hydro-electricity project as well as railways constructing
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ite, to have
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trong financial condition is mandatory,
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it might be postponed
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any time.
For example
, the Kaligandaki drinking water project of Nepal had been stopped for about 3 years because of not having sufficient fund required for finishing it.
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economical
support
plays
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vital role during
such
construction activities.
On the other hand
, the practical help on the presence of these
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organizations
themselves is the best idea to prevent the large sum of
money
from being corrupted. It means
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the budget which is separated for the particular purpose may not reach at the actual place due to the evil nature of politicians and officers. For
this
reason, there has been
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rend of providing the manpower, required equipment and materials by these organizations directly which has become more effective
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developing the country in some African states.
Hence
, helping directly from the goods and hands for the work is more fruitful In
coclusion
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conclusion
, financial
support
is needed to
accompish
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accomplish
the project work in a given time whereas the practical
support
protect
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the
money
from being corrupted,
therefore
both have their own importance. Having said that, I believe that, for the
countries
like ours, it would be far better if they assisted us practically rather than by giving
money
as the leaders of our
countries
are more greedy towards it.
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