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Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#workplace #countries #outweigh
These days there is an
increasing
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 for high-experienced workers than ever before. Your work
experience
 is valued more than even your
knowledge
 in a particular field. I agree with
this
 and would like to briefly discuss why advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Obviously, some
people
 would not agree with me as they still think that the more
knowledge
 you have than more valuable worker you have to be. They have a strong
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 in academic
knowledge
,
however
,
knowledge
 without practice is useless. Those
people
 might know everything theoretically but not
practically
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 and theory is paramount for universities but not for the real world. On the internet, I often
here
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 statements from C-level
people
 from top IT companies who
says
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 that for them, as
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otential employer, your life story is important. They want to hear how you tried to build something valuable and it’s not important did you fail or not and there is no story without
experience
. Obviously, they don’t underestimate
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alue of your
knowledge
, your academic
knowledge
, but your
experience
 means that you have not only some academic
knowledge
 from the university or book, but you were able to gain some
knowledge
 from your practical
experience
 and it should be much easier for you to integrate into
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ew team, communicate with
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 and your supervisor. In summary, I see that today’s employers have
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ar wider choice to the number of
people
 who are not only knowledgeable but
also
 have a broad
experience
, from all around the world. So I would highly recommend to keep increasing and diversify your portfolio of skills and
experience
 to be a valuable asset in the market.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • workplace
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • mentor
  • colleagues
  • innovation
  • stagnation
  • traditional methods
  • recent graduates
  • theoretical knowledge
  • diversity
  • viewpoints
  • proven ability
  • stability
  • industries
  • technology
  • adaptation
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