Some people argue that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Satisfaction towards things plays a crucial role in everybody's life. One school of thought believes that it is better to
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themselves in negative circumstances,
however
, others prefer to make regular
efforts
to improve their bad situations.
This
essay will intend to discuss both the points and according to me, trying hard and become successful is beneficial than accepting things. To initiate
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, the primary reason for the contentment of bad situations is
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ompetitive environment. In
this
competitive era, it becomes extremely difficult for
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individuals
to compete with the persons to attain higher scores in academics and
then
hired in reputed jobs.
Therefore
, some
individuals
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not able to stand in the competition and accept the jobs, whichever they can get.
Furthermore
, many
individuals
accept their poor circumstances because of
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hortage of funds. Many masses want to enhance their business but cannot do so due to the lack of investment which
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them contended to live with the things which they have. To epitomize, a small entrepreneur who wants to increase their level of organization by investing more in it, but can not do because of lack of money in their account. On the paradoxical side, no situation is insurmountable. Everything can be solved by doing
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hard work
.
Individuals
should put more
efforts
in order to solve their financial crisis. People should be so much hardworking, so that, they can achieve good scores in their academics and must have communication skills in order to get the job according to their specification.
Additionally
,
bussiness
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business
organisations should concentrate on rising their sales
instead
of profits.
For example
, if the businessman makes
efforts
on inclining the sales
then
, it automatically attracts more customers which
further
provides regular or more profits in the business. To recapitulate,
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ompetitive environment and lack of funds have made the life of people difficult and make them satisfied to remain on that situation,
however
, I personally believe that regular
efforts
towards studies and concentrating on increasing sales gives an opportunity to
individuals
to improve their worst conditions.
Submitted by Harmeet Singh Khera on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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