In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the United Kingdom, when a person reaches his or her retirement
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, they often move to an old
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home and their needs will be taken
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of by someone. The government often pay for
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or by their own children. In my opinion, the nation is liable to take
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citizens, even though they have their own sons or daughters and hold responsibility.
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, A country can run the administration effectively when it collects taxes from its citizens and in return when a person at his or her retirement
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, the government should protect and help them to lead a peaceful life.
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, A guaranteed regular payment is possible only by the country’s administration since it has an organized sector and enough funds. All beneficiaries would receive their pension on a regular basis, which would keep them out of mental stress. In Great Britain, the registered retirees who are eligible to avail all government subsidies and pension are much happier than the unregistered elder people, according to a survey taken by Cambridge University
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parents often spend their major share of earning to bring up their children which includes food, education and costumes. After they turn old, it is now their children’s time to support them.
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, Old people feel happy and relax when they spend their time with grandchildren’s rather than at an old
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home. My personal life had a clear example, my father had taken
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of his mother and she was happy staying with his son and grandsons, later she was admitted at an old
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house because of a work-related transfer. After six months, she had a heart attack due to mental depression, and it took three months for her to recover. Having considered the above arguments, in my view a nation is ultimately responsible for its citizens despite their generations to take
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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