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Universities should accept equal number of male and female studying every subject. Do you agree or disagree. Give reason and include relevant example from your own knowledge.

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Today's modern world offers ample opportunities to learn, explore and ponder wide
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universities offering
 hundreds of thousands of streams. But in many cases one
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 out is that number of male students overweighing number of females in
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I will try to argue about a notion that universities should host streams and courses with same
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 students from both the
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prominent
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 genders Having gender equality at the university level is in my opinion very
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 to increase overall opportunities women had
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 a social fabric of the world. It in turn will enhance
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experience as
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different thoughts and view to a
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 subject which makes the learning for all students richer. I hade a female project partner in my final year thesis and I owe to her maturity and promptness as we end up
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 project competitions.
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very few seats of some of the streams
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 quality of some studies but in
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these problems have less of on weight against
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ffering. It is
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 a possibility that some deserving male candidates might miss the bus, which is a part of
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ecessary sacrifices need to be made. In conclusion
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I would present an example of my country of birth. It was a revolution when
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educated
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1st century as India now has more than 80% of literacy rate, which was almost zero , 150 years back.
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