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Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that a
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 is not the ideal place for an animal to live in it.In recent years, more and more people have believed that the existence of the
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 is useless,
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 it should be shut down.
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 situation and purpose alternatives to an animal park in case of closing it. One of the most significant
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oo is the negative change
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 animal behaviour.
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 is because
animals
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 feel that they are captive in their cells, which negatively affects their mental state. To illustrate
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, some species
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 as lion and monkey become wild and fierce toward humans when someone is trying to feed them.
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, by closing the animal parks, governments should organize trips to
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wild life
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 so that people can watch
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 in their natural
hibatiants
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habitants
.
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animals
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 to return to their normal life safely and gives people
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pportunity to watch closely their behaviour.
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, the death of many
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 has indicated that
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oo is responsible for these accidents.
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 happened because some of the staff
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don't
 have experience in taking care of
animals
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.
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, If the birds do not get its food
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three times daily, there is a high chance that they may die. The main cause behind
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 case is that some of the employees are younger adults who do not have any information about the eating habits of
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 bird. A perfect substitute to a
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, public authorities could encourage citizens to join species observation groups
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 as birds or
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dolphins
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 observatory.
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 will result in protecting
animals
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 from extinction and faulty death. Inconclusion,
animals
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 behaviours and their decease have been regarded as major problems of
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oo. If a
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 was closed, there would be many alternatives to
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 place
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wildlife
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 trips and
animals
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 observatory.

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