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government investment in public transport and reductions in public transport prices will greatly help the figh against transport pollution Do you agree or disagree ?

#government #investment #transport #reductions #prices #figh #pollution
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It is believed that the government could make a difference in the fight against
pollution
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public transport and by reducing the tickets prices . I agree , with the statement because in
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 a way more people would be attracted to use the bus as a transportation method rather than taking the personal vehicle as a
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 choice .
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esay
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supportive reasons . On the one hand , the
pollution
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 is a very discussed subject at the moment ,
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 changes should be made to solve the issue . One of the results of the
pollution
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 is the
clima
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climate
 change around the world which is affecting the environment as well as endangering certain species . In a recent survey carried out by the Health
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association
 , the
pollution
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 problem was the main factor to blame for the
extintion
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extinction
 of polar bears . The Government plays a massive role in creating conditions to avoid
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 damage . As researches were done , the authorities could make a
postive
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positive
 change by improving
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public transportation and providing more vehicles , as more people are finding
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ifficult to catch the bus in the early hours . The price tickets are
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 another reason at which many individuals are looking when they think of the transport as well as the
lengh
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length
 of the journey . By reducing the cost of the trip , the busses could become a more popular choice among citizens . In conclusion ,
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