Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do man working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays, a lot of
people
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have health problems due to not considering enough
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for exercise. There are some reasons
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as long working
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and the fact that it is not important to them,
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there are solutions. The main reason
people
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avoid daily
exercises
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is that the working
hours
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are very long, or they have duties at home.
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, they are too tired or busy
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any physical activity. Take a working mother as an example, their main job begins after working
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; they need to prepare meals, care for their children, and do things around the house, therefor they prefer to rest in their free
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instead
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of doing
exercises
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.
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, many
people
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do not believe
exercises
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to be a daily activity.
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they do not consider any
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for it in their daily or weekly activities.
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, there are some solutions to
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problem.
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, employers can consider a gap during working
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for employees to go to a nearby gym to do some
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.
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, all employees not only get more productive and fresh for the day, they
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become healthier. It is
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the responsibility of the government to increase public awareness
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nform individuals about the importance of regular
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. In conclusion, it is evident that some reasons
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as lack of
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, and less importance of daily
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to individuals
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associated with
people
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preferring not to have any daily
exercises
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. There are many solutions that can be considered by employers to avoid serious health problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • physical activity
  • motivation
  • interest
  • stress
  • fatigue
  • exhaustion
  • fitness facilities
  • outdoor spaces
  • technology
  • sedentary leisure activities
  • awareness
  • importance
  • health
  • unhealthy lifestyle choices
  • poor diet
  • smoking
  • workplace culture
  • work-life balance
  • time constraints
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