Some people believe that it is the responsibility of the government to transport their children to schools. Others say it is the responsibility of the parents to get their children to school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Picking or dropping
children
from home to
school
or viewers should be by
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ublic
sector
or by their
parents
is a matter of debate in these days. In my opinion
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it ought to be the responsibility of immediate
parents
rather than the government authorities.
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essay is going to detail both of the views.
To begin
with,
p
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ublic
sector
owns
the
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transportation from ages. That means, since the ancient time, right from the beginning of motor vehicles and long buses, all the expenses were borne by
this
sector
because of the limited resources in the hands of
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rivate
sector
.
Also
, people pay the part of their income to the government in the form of taxes and in exchange
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they demand common
transport
facilities for them and for their
children
.
Furthermore
, right to education for
children
may require an easy to and fro travel to
s
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chool to home,
that is
possible with the help of ample money collectors and that again possible by the sectors which
has
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maximum resources and
that is
p
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ublic
sector
. One survey report is important to mention here, where the Punjab
transport
department found 60%
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parents
required from the state to be taken their
children
from
school
to home by public
sector
vehicles. On the flip side, guardians in
m
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odern era, find poor safety measures in public
sector
transportations. They like to carry their
children
by their personal means. That can
also
be the reason to stay connected with their wards for the maximum time
however
would not be possible due to their hasty and monotonous life.
Also
, with the induction of many short courses in good parenting, people learn the value of spending time with their kids and the benefits to escort them till
school
by
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their own.
For example
, if a father drops his son or daughter till the doorstep of
school
, he may take an eye on the uniform standard and other quality measures related to studies while sitting in
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ar or accompanying in the private
transport
they use. In conclusion,
therefore
I believe that leaving
a ward
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to
school
by
parents
brings many benefits that may not be possible if/she is sent to
the
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public
transport
.
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