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Every country should have a free-health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Health is wealth and
that is
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 why every country should provide a free-health
service
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 regardless of its availability to medical treatments because they are expensive to get. In my view, I may agree that free
service
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 should be given,
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, somewhat I disagree to some extent.
First
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 and foremost,providing free-health
service
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 in any country is beneficial for the reason that it enables the low average citizens to acquire medical
services
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.
For example
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, a farmer that does not have
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medical insurance it is difficult to get treatment,
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,a free medical
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 is of great help.For some countries like the Philippines ,there is the PCSO that offers help to
people
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 who cannot afford to pay the medical bills.Certainly,having
this
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 program would be of great help to the
people
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On the other hand
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,there are some points that would be not so beneficial if there will be an influx of
people
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 that would require free medical
services
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.In
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imit as well in giving free
services
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.
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,the health ministry must implement
such
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 rules in order to equally provide medical treatments ,so basically,implementing certain
criterias
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criteria
 that should be given to the one's deserving or who needs it most. To conclude,in my own opinion,I agree that every country must have rules and policies in providing free medical
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 to all the
people
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,
although
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 it is not easy to get the most latest medical treatments due to its high cost but to be able to create a good program,there is a better chance to provide help to all the
people
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 who are in need.
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