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Taking a year of between finishing school and starting university is a waste of students' time. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#year #school #university #waste #students #time
It is told that the gap taken during
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ransit period from high schooling study to graduation, is useless. I opine that it is not a correct view.
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To begin
 with, the distance between 2 education periods will helpful to
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tudent to learn practical aspects that they have studied in their schooling.
for instance
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they can join a job and find that how to write a letter to different authorities or
stake holder
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 of the company.
Moreover
, the interest would be maintained which might have lost due to continuous
monotonus
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monotonous
 study, as the routine life to wake up, go to school, return , complete home-work, go for sleep and
next
 day same routine! Others think that it is waste of time as students who takes break would be behind than the students who
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 their study, they are
also
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 its own way. To illustrate if there is a job opportunity, in
such
 a situation, both who have completed
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bachelor
 but one year age difference and age criteria would
definetly
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definitely
 affect. To conclude, each and every coin has two sides, but
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 still believe that
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irst idea is superior
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