All over the world, the number of overweight people is growing. What do you feel are the main causes of this? What are the effects?

Nowadays, obesity is the biggest and the most critical medical threat mankind is facing. People from all the sections of life including teenagers, adults and so on are suffering
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medical condition. We will share a few possible reasons and consequences of the aforesaid statement in the below essay. To commence with, the development in technology
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hysical work of humans to a great extent.
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, the majority of the tasks which were earlier performed manually are now automated and require low to none human intervention.
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, in today's fast-paced digital lifestyle, everybody is getting inclined towards ready to eat fast-food containing saturated fats which are difficult to digest.
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eating habits is one the major cause of
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growing
problem
.
Furthermore
, consequences can be drastic
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the above
problem
. Obesity is the root cause of many medical issues
such
as high blood pressure, diabetes and many more.
Thus
, it is connected to other medical issues
also
. To illustrate
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, according to a recently published report by the medical council ninety per cent of the deaths recorded due to diabetes and heart attack were obese. To conclude, the increasing number
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cases of overweight is a worldwide
problem
especially to the
first
world countries and have to be dealt
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properly. The effects of
this
problem
are deadly and are giving rise to
further
medical problems.
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