Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool.Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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modern world, technologies are rampant to every individual, somehow, it is part of our daily lives, some people find

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game good for educational tool and funny at the same time, though others, disagree with

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idea and can cause a harmful effect. In

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, there is an application that promotes or help people to be educated while having fun playing it.

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, the children application games,

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game teach the kid how to read and identify colours.

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could help the children to learn easily and be educated.

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in an Ipad or computer needs proper guidance with the parent.

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, most of the youngsters today's generation are addicted to social media, mostly, the

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, according to the CNN news report, mostly young people who played Mobile Legend was diagnosed of having illness in

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young age, most have eye and mental problem, they get addicted and can face their laptop more than 24 hours without eating and even taking personal hygiene,

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games is being discouraged. In conclusion, playing

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games is not bad, it will help others to be educated while having fun at the same time but sometimes if there is no proper monitoring or guidance from a parent it could cause the kids to be addict and worst to be ill.

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