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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of traveling to a work place every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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"Employees" are the key factor of success for any successfully functioning organisation and they
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 play a vital role in the workplace development and multicultural place. I disagree with the above claim that as the disadvantage outweigh the advantage, and in the following essay shall submit my
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supporting
 claim in my point of view.
To begin
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technology
 has advanced so much that any work we do is done by connecting to internet and staff would be able to log-in to their personal accounts and take remote desktop connection in order to
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resolve
 the issue, while they are sitting in the
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 on standby. If the same
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office
 and along with his
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colleagues
 he would be able to interact with them. whereas, if he is in
home
 their would be no
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interaction
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 no productivity.
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, if
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 team-member is working from
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 they would not be following the
office
 timing and would
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 to their accounts and so there is any monitoring in the server
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 like they would be working
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consistently
constantly
 in the
office
 timings. To
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furthermore
, working from
home
 would result in serious health issue because they would be facing monitor for
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xtended period of hours would result in eye-sight problems, and would
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 result in obesity.
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resent scenario COVID-19 which resulted in
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lobal pandemic, and
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 now working from help, which resulted in unnecessary buying of
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 items and utility bills. In
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contrast
 , to make
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orkplace more productive every one should be
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working
 in the same place, as
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 would help them to grow skill and interact with their project leader. In a nutshell, based on the claims that have been discussed . I disagree that
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ajority employee should go to
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ffice rather working from
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hence
 there are more disadvantage rather than advantages.
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