Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in childer, while others think it is the fault of the parents.discuss both views and give your opionin

Being obese, itself very poisonous for every person as it carries more disease and other life issues and nowadays it is really common among our youngster. Some people think that the
government
is responsible while I agree with those who feel that it is the fault of the guardians who take care of their
children
health
. On one hand, some people might argue that the
government
should take a strict note on
this
issue. The main reasons for overweight
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the availability of fast food and packed food. The
government
can easily force fast-food restaurants that they should not provide their services to the kids or without any superiority of family member.
As a result
, the kids are not allowed to eat without their elder permission.
Moreover
, the
Government
should think of rising tax to packed food available to markets, which means it is now difficult to buy for every ordinary person who never thinks of sending his
child
to any gym or sports facility.
However
, in my opinion,
children
health
is the most important factor for
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aretaker.
Although
parents
think it is important to give freedom to their
children
, it is as equally necessary to keep eye on them.
Parents
should know where their adolescent spending money.
In addition
, they can guide them
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what is beneficial for their
health
and what they have to eat and on what timings. Even worse, most
parents
in society never think of sending their
child
to any physical activities. In the past, schools playgrounds are enough for students but now most schools hardly have any grounds, which means that it is making
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ifficult for students to get involved in any kind of physical activities. My best argument is the technology that makes every other person lazy and couch potato. While I concede that the involvement of technology is vital for today's world, still I feel that it totally ruin physical
health
of a
child
because
parents
do not care about how long or for what time their
children
involved in mobile or online games. In conclusion,
Although
the
government
need to forcefully implement some rules, in the
health
of a
child
his caretaker plays the major and foremost role.
Therefore
, on balance, I believe
parents
should keep eye on their
kids
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routines and activities.
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