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One of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified foods are a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays people are starving all around the
world
.
Food
 scarcity became one of the major concerns for the human being, some believe that scientifically changed foods can be a probable option for combatting
this
 global phenomenon,
on the contrary
 others disagree on that. In
this
 essay I will discuss why I think it will not resolve the
food
 shortage problem, rather it will only be benefitted to the
countries
 which have
the
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competent financial ability. There are many benefits of having scientific involvement in
food
 enrichment since it will open a new era of innovation for the
world
. New technology has been emerged in every sector along with the agricultural domain, which is creating wide ranges of possibilities.
Moreover
, if scientists can invent a process to modify the harvesting system to improve the amount of crop, it will be beneficial for the people who are suffering from famine. According to the current statistics
countries
 that have been generated diverse ways to improve the capacity of the
food
, have achieved a certain level of competitiveness in the
food
 industry. Despite the benefits, there are certain problems that may pave the way to create some inconveniences. A huge amount of finance is needed to invent and produce new technology for increased
food
, which might be a hindrance for the poorer
countries
. Even though some of the
countries
 may take initiatives to endure the possible scarcity of
food
 but it might not be
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 for the whole
world
 due to less capability of investment.
As a result
, the scientific solutions will not uproot the problem as a whole whereas the goal was to diminish the problem from the root. In conclusion,
although
 genetic improvement can open a new door for resolving
food
 insufficiency, it might not be a proficient way for financially weak
countries
. In my opinion,
countries
 all over the
world
 should get involved and look into a more plausible solution to deal with famine.
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