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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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I agree with people who say that too much time is spent on learning
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 and not enough on learning practical
skills
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 across all levels of education. As someone who has gone through all levels and is now in the labour market, I wholeheartedly agree because of my experiences. The importance of learning
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 cannot be gainsaid,
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, we
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 have to understand that said "
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" do not wholly equip an individual for the real world. Nowadays,
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 can be quickly gotten with the advent of the internet. You do not need
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 to learn things you can read up in a few minutes through a Google-search.
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, you cannot get practical
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 from surfing the internet. I spent five
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 in the university studying engineering, in my school, we spent 70% of our time learning theories. For
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 a hands-on course as engineering, that was simply not enough. I have learnt so much more about my field from approximately two
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 working as an engineer. A lot of the things I know, I learnt from people who do not even have a formal education. Beyond technical practical experiences, I have
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 gained knowledge on other
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 that
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 made my integration as
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 adult a lot smoother. That sort of knowledge is not gotten by focusing on learning
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. It appears that as a society, we are catching on to the importance of practical
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.
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 is evident in the work-study programs that many universities have adopted. That way, their students get
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alanced education, both
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 and practicals. Another evidence is the prestige that volunteerism and internships have gained over the
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. More people are interested in
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 opportunities because it helps them develop
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 that the four corners of an organized institution
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 as schools do not provide.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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