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Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time discus both these views, and give your opinion

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Physical education courses are believed by a growing number of people to be a crucial part of every
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child's
 education.Others,
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academic
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 is more important. In my opinion,these two
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 should be considered and keeping
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alance between them is the key to
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 success. On the one hand,courses which contain physical activities are necessary to be incorporated
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school
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curriculum
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 classes are not only beneficial for
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 mental health but
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 effective for improving their physical
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, having physical educations in
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children’s
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 daily schedule can help their body to release useful hormones which lead them to avoid obesity.
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,
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 hormones can help
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children
 to keep their feelings balanced which lead their mind to function properly.
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, the necessity of academic
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 is undeniable. Since most of
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areers require qualified employees who have academic backgrounds,
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 student should devote enough amount of their time to gaining a great deal of knowledge about their
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subjects
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 and
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acquire
 different practical skills.
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 courses will provide a wider range of job opportunities as they spend enough time in learning useful academic in their
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 ages. In my honest opinion, schools should place a
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premium
 on both
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 because each of which
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 vitally important. Even though the main purpose of attending
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 is gaining academic knowledge, mental and physical health should be considered because a qualified educated person will not be successful unless he or she is physically and mentally in
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good status. In conclusion, physical
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 classes and academics Are two
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 on
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 children should focus during their
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 times, but their importance
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 is still debatable .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical education (PE)
  • holistic development
  • lifelong healthy habits
  • academic performance
  • core subjects
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • social skills
  • critical thinking skills
  • information age
  • balanced approach
  • holistic education
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