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As air travel has become cheaper, more and more people are travelling abroad for their vacations instead of visiting places in their own country. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays, the declining charges of airlines have supported the fascination of the public to fly abroad on vacations rather than travelling destinations in their home
country
. In
this
 essay, we will understand both merits and demerits of
this
 development.
To begin
 with, due to diversity of culture, climatic conditions and lifestyle, foreign tourism can enhance the spectrum of pleasure which may not be accomplished in the home
country
.
In other words
, while visiting the sites of a different nation one can experience views and sceneries which are not available in their own
country
.
Additionally
, it can
also
 help in widening the cultural knowledge of the visitors.
For example
, 2 years back, I travelled to Thailand on a short trip to especially visit a famous floating market because there is none in India.
However
, flying abroad can affect the tourism sector of the home
country
. Since, a large set of the population is dependent on the travel industry, rejecting local destinations over foreign places can negatively impact the community businesses and
thus
, making it difficult for the people working into tourism industry to survive.
Further
, an increase in international vacations can
also
 lead to an increase in the outflow of cash from India to other countries and thereby, affecting  economic growth.
For example
, people of Goa are majorly dependent on the tourists for their livelihoods. They have either opened a restaurant, a hotel or an automobile rental shop.
Therefore
, if the people start choosing other international destinations over Goa, the residents of the city may face financial crises. To conclude,
although
 travelling abroad can enrich a person with new cultural experience and scenic views, it can negatively impact the tours and
travelindustry
Correct your spelling
travel industry
 as well as the financial growth of a
country
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • destination countries
  • hospitality
  • cultural exchange
  • global understanding
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • sustainable development
  • local tourism
  • domestic tourists
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