In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Now a days
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, there is a high
differentation
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differentiation
between
high class
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families and
low class
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low-class
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families, which includes people earning more than lower wages,
therefore
this
creates a barrier
inbetween
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between
in between
them. In the following essay
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shall discuss my views and
thus
conclude with a
resonable
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reasonable
solution. On the one hand, citizens in some countries earn more because they are multi-
talanted
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talented
how
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pend most of the time learning more than one skill or even some might invest in stocks or do
tarding
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trading
, that would generate extra
income
.
In addition
to
this
, some regions provide high
income
to workers there
beacuse
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because
there is a high demand for the prefered field.
Likewise
, there are some states that are so expensive to live, and there would be high
income
generated and for their cost of living.
For instance
, In Sydney Australia, is considered as the most liveable city, is expensive cities
aswell
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as well
, residents there earn more
income
and spend more.
On the other hand
, when compared to
INDiA
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India
which is considered as
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lobally emerging country, is
also
listed as lively cities is relatively cheaper than rest of the world, and residents there earn wages less as the cost of living is less.
Furthermore
, individuals earn less when compared to others because they are not
familier
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familiar
with learning new languages and doesn't want to invest their money in
income
generated fields. By not taking all
this
in the consideration some
person's blindly see
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the wages of other working in different regions and come with a meaningless answer that its best place to work. To conclude, based on the above essay it may vary from person to person, and one should be taking
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account that its best to live with what they have
instead
of aiming for higher grounds.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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