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Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#education #healthcare #charge #government #responsibility #people #services
Education
 and Healthcare
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ital role in our society to build a robust and
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healthy
country
. So, In
this
 easy we will be discussing whether these systems should be easily accessible by providing free services by the government or citizens of the
country
 should be paid. I would
also
 like to share my opinion in the favor of providing free services
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up to
to
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ertain extent by the governments. Through Literacy
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people can gain knowledge and increase chances of getting more reputed jobs in their fields
such
 that they can improve their family status. So, It is better to provide free
education
atleast
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at least
 until their 12th grade
such
 that their foundation would be strong. Later on, people can take care of
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est of their expenses.
For instance
, In
canada
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,
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the
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overnment is offering full access to
education
 through public schools, and so Canada is known as
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ore educated
country
 in the world.
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it is better to provide basic medical services
through
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 providing insurance programmes.
On the other hand
, If
Education
 and Medical Care are not provided free of cost
then
illeteracy
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illiteracy
 grows in our nations and it will be highly difficult for people to pay their minimum health needs. An unhealthy community cannot survive and become
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oor
country
.
Finally
, It should not be fully burdened on governments, as it might lead to insufficient funds. So it is always better to pay
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ertain amount by
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ommunity of the
country
 as well.
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